I hope this is a good place to put this.
I am an aspiring writer, and I have loads of ideas for stories. As an aspiring writer I welcome critisms because they help me to become a better writer.
I am going to be posting a story idea that I have been working on recently, and I would love to hear any postive or negative criticism you may have.
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The Giant-Killers is a team of characters from myths, legends, fairy tales and fables who come together to fight Ares, who has declared war on all of humanity.
The members of this team are (In order of appearance)
Orpheus
Hua Mulan
Sinbad the Sailor
Jack Horner (a combination of Jack and the Bean-Stalk, Little Boy Blue, Jack be Nimble and Little Jack Horner),
Talos (a man made of iron),
Mulrisc (the pirate daughter of an Irish king),
Charles (the huntsman from Snow White ) and Phillip Thomas (the Beast from Beauty and the Beast)(Charles and Phillip are twins),
Elizabeth (a combination of Snow White, Cinderella and Molly Whuppie),
Rosabell (a combination of Little Red Riding Hood, Belle from 'Beauty and the Beast', Rose Red from 'Snow White and Rose Red' and one of Cinderella's step-sisters.
Marigold (a combination of Goldilocks, Rapunzel, and Cinderella's other step-sister)
Perseus (the son of Zeus, he will be replacing Orpheus)
Rumpelstiltskin (I thought about having him as the villain, but I didn't want
Patrick Thomas (the Pied Piper, who, in this story, is Charles and Phillip's older brother)
Robin Hood (Not actually Robin Hood, but a character based of him (his name won't be Robin Hood either))
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VillainS
At first, it'll only appear as if there is one villain, which will be Ares, but eventually there will be revealed that their are four villains who are eached based off of one of the apocalyptical four horsemen. And because I am open to criticism, I am going to go ahead and reveal all four of them
Apollo will be the the white horseman of conquest (actually, I call the white horseman false peace.)
Ares will be the red horseman of war.
Dionysus will be the black horseman of famine.
Hermes will be the pale horseman of death.
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I am for sure going to be using Apollo and Ares as two of the horsemen, and I do like the combination that I have because of the fact that they are all half-brothers.
Even though, either Hades or Thanatos would have been an obvious choice for death, I wanted someone who was of a younger generation than Hades, like a cousin of Apollo and Ares. Then I read of Hermes as a death god due to his role of bringing the dead to the underworld, and I choose him.
As far as famine, I wasn't sure who to use. In the bible, when it talks of the black horseman, the horseman says not to hurt the wine, which is why I thought of Dionysus.
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Please respons with criticism. Do you like? Why? Do you not like it? Why? Have any suggestions for any of the characters? What? Want more information on my characters, maybe how and why they join the team, ask me, and I'll post it.
I am an aspiring writer, and I have loads of ideas for stories. As an aspiring writer I welcome critisms because they help me to become a better writer.
I am going to be posting a story idea that I have been working on recently, and I would love to hear any postive or negative criticism you may have.
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The Giant-Killers is a team of characters from myths, legends, fairy tales and fables who come together to fight Ares, who has declared war on all of humanity.
The members of this team are (In order of appearance)
Orpheus
Hua Mulan
Sinbad the Sailor
Jack Horner (a combination of Jack and the Bean-Stalk, Little Boy Blue, Jack be Nimble and Little Jack Horner),
Talos (a man made of iron),
Mulrisc (the pirate daughter of an Irish king),
Charles (the huntsman from Snow White ) and Phillip Thomas (the Beast from Beauty and the Beast)(Charles and Phillip are twins),
Elizabeth (a combination of Snow White, Cinderella and Molly Whuppie),
Rosabell (a combination of Little Red Riding Hood, Belle from 'Beauty and the Beast', Rose Red from 'Snow White and Rose Red' and one of Cinderella's step-sisters.
Marigold (a combination of Goldilocks, Rapunzel, and Cinderella's other step-sister)
Perseus (the son of Zeus, he will be replacing Orpheus)
Rumpelstiltskin (I thought about having him as the villain, but I didn't want
Patrick Thomas (the Pied Piper, who, in this story, is Charles and Phillip's older brother)
Robin Hood (Not actually Robin Hood, but a character based of him (his name won't be Robin Hood either))
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VillainS
At first, it'll only appear as if there is one villain, which will be Ares, but eventually there will be revealed that their are four villains who are eached based off of one of the apocalyptical four horsemen. And because I am open to criticism, I am going to go ahead and reveal all four of them
Apollo will be the the white horseman of conquest (actually, I call the white horseman false peace.)
Ares will be the red horseman of war.
Dionysus will be the black horseman of famine.
Hermes will be the pale horseman of death.
---
I am for sure going to be using Apollo and Ares as two of the horsemen, and I do like the combination that I have because of the fact that they are all half-brothers.
Even though, either Hades or Thanatos would have been an obvious choice for death, I wanted someone who was of a younger generation than Hades, like a cousin of Apollo and Ares. Then I read of Hermes as a death god due to his role of bringing the dead to the underworld, and I choose him.
As far as famine, I wasn't sure who to use. In the bible, when it talks of the black horseman, the horseman says not to hurt the wine, which is why I thought of Dionysus.
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Please respons with criticism. Do you like? Why? Do you not like it? Why? Have any suggestions for any of the characters? What? Want more information on my characters, maybe how and why they join the team, ask me, and I'll post it.
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